Many students find it difficult to pay attention at school. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

A number of adults
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that
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it’s too hard to be
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education at
school
and note institutions as
an important places
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. From my point of view, the main reason for
this
issue is social networks and people are able to get out of
this
situation by controlling their daily routines. Nowadays a lot of students do not interested in going to
school
and they do not want to learn general subjects there because, the main reason is that social media is getting one of the most popular kinds of cyber activity, people, especially adults think, the institutes are too boring for them and there is not anything to learn.
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, describe yourself, there is a person who is really interested in learning, but once upon a
time
his closest friend recommended him or her one of the popular kinds of
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or very interesting games, so by the
time
that person will start to get into internet space, by losing his mind, he will start to forget real life, including
school
subjects too, so that perhaps in Japan
school
tutors are strongly controlled students attitude for education and limit their
time
of using the internet. In
this
situation, the main solution for
this
issue can be, to make a correct and straight daily routine of using the internet, if individuals will start to control their
time
with their straight schedule, of ,course they will be able to get out of cyberspace of media.
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, the most popular writer of the magazine “Guardians”, Joy Robinson said that
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nowadays we can not control our children and it is getting too hard to make them interested in
school
subjects, but if we start to help them to get out from
this
situation, by making with them their correct routine of the day, of ,course results will be wonderful “ To conclude, if we will not
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start
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what’s happening in our modern world, we can lose almost everything, but if we will start to study harder, might be it would be the biggest step toward the future .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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