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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.

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In modern times, the issue of sharing
information
 has become a controversial topic. There are those who say that giving
data
 to each other is good in scientific research,
business
 and the academic world,
however
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 others believe that there are few
data
 that are too important and very much valuable to be shared with other
people
.
This
 essay will examine both sides of the argument and provide an overall opinion. Generally speaking, there are two main reasons why the public believe that
information
share
 is a good thing in the education and
business
 field. Perhaps the main reason why folk are in favour of
this
idea
 is that
people
 believe that in a scientific way
share
 can enhance human knowledge.
For example
, in an
information
-sharing process new
idea
 comes up, that can be a benefactor for any field not only science projects but
also
 for
business
 and education purposes.
Besides
this
,
business
 and education can grow in only one way which is based on
information
. Because, if you don't get to
share
 anything
then
 you maybe not expect other
people
 that they will
share
data
 with you. Despite these arguments, there is
also
 a case for the
idea
 that
people
 are more concerned about valuable or important
information
 not going to get into criminal hands. A good illustration of
this
 is that technology is developing and good folk or bad
people
 both developing their
idea
also
. So if somehow bad
people
 get crucial
information
 might create something that affects maybe the entire world population need to face a big problem that has no cure . In conclusion,
this
 must be said that sharing
data
 has become a complex issue with no easy solution.But my opinion is that humans need to trust those
people
 who are more trustable,
otherwise
this
 world will control by some brainless folk.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • innovation
  • collective knowledge
  • security risk
  • proprietary information
  • competitive advantage
  • democratization
  • sensitive technology
  • ethical guidelines
  • nondisclosure agreements
  • peer-review processes
  • validated
  • open access
  • regulated access
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