Biotechnology companies all over the world are developing different types of genetically modified (GM) crops. However, not enough is known about these crops on our health and the environment. Interfering with nature in this way should be prohibited. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that nowadays biotechnology is one of the popular and fascinating fields of science. More exciting about it is that genetically modified
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give opportunities and benefits to science, medicine, agriculture
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along
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with product industry.
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, there are some thoughts that they have disadvantages for humans and the environment as well. I totally agree with
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statement
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this
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essay will outline reasons and examples for that.
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, genetically accelerated crops are not natural and lack original vitamins because they are full of artificial additives. The reason is that they are not the original ones
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in order to change their qualities
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chemicals are being used in order to get genetically modified ingredients.
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, we can see a plethora of apples in the store which are exaggeratedly red
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however
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they are artificial and don't have a taste.
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, they are not degradable because of their artificial and changed ingredients, so they can be a problem for waste management.
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, genetically modified things can be made for the purpose
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different
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but
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they are not healthy and environmentally friendly.
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, genetically modified crops can trigger cancer in people.
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is because they are made of artificial
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and chemicals which are not beneficial for folks
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.
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, many meat
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and vegetables are raised in ways by
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special tablets and chemicals so that they can impact people's
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and blood pressure.
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, compared to naturally modified crops are harmful to society in terms of they can bring cancers.
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more attention is directed to genetically modified
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since they provide opportunities to change and increase the capacity and quality of production.
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they have advantages , at the same
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they are not beneficial for the community. I agree to a high extent that health and environmental problems are inevitable with these kinds of
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since they are not natural
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or
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artificial.

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task response
Make your view clear. Say your position in the first part and keep it in the rest of the essay.
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Add more strong and clear ideas. Use true facts or clear proof.
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You show a clear view that you agree with the topic.
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