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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effect on our lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most people don'
t
 follow a healthy lifestyle especially, on foods they are running behind instantly prepared items. I agree with that point because it will
make
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 health issues
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Firstly
 In the modern era, we
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 mostly influenced by a lot of advertisements, which will tempt our mindset. Youngsters mostly prefer junk
food
such
 as noodles, pasta, and pizza and they think it's more fashionable.
consequently
, they are not aware of the side effects
such
 as digestion problems, obesity etc. in that fast
food
 contains excess oil, and sugar so it will shorten our lifetime. In recent times, we had a lot of fast
food
 restaurants everywhere and they will offer door delivery. These foods don'
t
 have nutrition and more combination of chemicals so they will affect our health. Most people are addicted to the taste of fast
food
then
 they don'
t
 have to cook.
For example
, one of the articles in India evaluated most children's growth lack of nutrition and
also
 most adults faced obesity
due to
 junk foods.
On the other hand
, instant
food
 helps those who are rushing for their work and school. The advent of technology will help to reduce our work burden. Some physically challenged people
also
 make their
food
 within a minute. For university students and working professionals, those who are staying in the hostel instant
food
 best choice for them.
However
, they didn'
t
 get nutrition and faced a lot of health issues
such
 as
blood
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 pressure and sugar etc. To
all
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put it into a nutshell, Eating habits will change our lifestyle especially, junk
food
 will shorter our lifetime so a healthy diet will help us to lead a good life.
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Structure
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Response
Provide a more comprehensive response to the prompt by exploring the reasons behind the trend of consuming fast food and addressing potential counterarguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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