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Some people think that the teenage years are the happinest time of most people lives, others think that adult brings more happiness, inspite greater responsibities

#people #years #happinest #time #lives #adult #happiness #inspite #responsibities
It is argued that juvenile
time
 is more interesting
of
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in
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 most
people
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people's
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 lives but others suppose
adult
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adults
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 have a lot of happiness
although
 they get more responsible. In my opinion, I think
teenage
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the teenage
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 years are the best
time
 in each
others
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other's
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 life. I have some reasons to support
this
 idea.
First
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 off all, teenage
time
that
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apply
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you still live with
parents
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your parents
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 and they cover all of
things
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the things
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 for you. You could focus to learn and save
time
 for yourself without thinking
everything
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about everything
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such
 as,
make
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making
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 money and do not have to take care
somebody
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.
Moreover
,
this
time
 you will have a lot of friends at school and have many activities with them.
this
make
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makes
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 you excited and happy with pure friends in school.
This
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At this
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 age you can do anything which you are passion because you have a lot of
time
 to do.
Beside
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 that, when you grow up, you have to find
job
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a job
the job
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 to make money and get
marry
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married
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. You have more responsibilities with your family and find your position in
the
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apply
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society. Nowadays,
lifes
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life
life's
life is
 so hard day by day and happy times reduce each day.
Adult
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Adults
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 have to find various
way
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ways
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 to
survie
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survive
 and take care
for
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of
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 their children. Maybe
some
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sometimes
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time
 they feel happy too but
i
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I
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 think it
quite
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is quite
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few
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a few
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time
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times
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. In conclusion, teenage times
is
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are
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wonderful
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a wonderful
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time
of
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in
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 human
lives
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life
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. I
alway
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always
 wish to come back
my
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to my
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 young times and
do
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apply
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not think about all
problems
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my problems
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. it is comfortable and naive. That
time
have
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has
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 various good friends and
real
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really
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connecting
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connections
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.
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