Longer life span and improvements in the health of older people suggest that people over the age of 65 can continue to live full and active lives. In what ways can society benefit from the contribution that older people can make?

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With the progress of medical science, modern people’s
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span has been lengthened significantly than centuries before. Since that, the
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life time
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after retirement take nearly
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of
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the amount
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and how
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to use
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time meaning become an important issue to the elderly and
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essay will outline three ways in which
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rest of
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can meaning to
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. Sharing their practical
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working
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students is one of the ways that
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elders
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can contribute to
society
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. Students in school often only learn text
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and
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theories
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.
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The elder
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who has more than 30
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experience
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can share
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students
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knowledge that couldn’t learn in
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school.
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in university often
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former managers to have a speech on the cases that the speaker
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.
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, some of the elders’
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too old to suitable
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nowadays or they’re not good at giving
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. Another way in which the elderly can contribute to
society
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is by participating the historical interview to store their special memory. In the past decades, thousands of elders who had
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WWII
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by writers, TV programs,
historians
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and historians
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about their
experience
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on
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field
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the field
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, which became autobiographies, movies, documentaries and history resources. Senior citizens have
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an enormous
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historical
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resources
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about
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a big
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event
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events
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or local
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communities
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. With
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the interview
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interview
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interviews
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, we can store
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precious resource for research of history.
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have a
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life
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of life
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experience
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and time. With proper use, they can contribute to
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the community
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by inheriting knowledge that they’re advantage
on
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of
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or helping historical research and store, which make pensionable people
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have another way to benefit
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society
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