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Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some argue that
vaccinations
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 for
children
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, which are not essential to
prevent
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diseases
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, might be dangerous. In my opinion,
children
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 must be injected to protect them from contagious
diseases
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,
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 might have some minor risks. Vaccinated
children
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 may experience side effects, which is one of the reasons why parents are wary of vaccinating their
children
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. Their symptoms may range from mild ones, including fever and swelling, to more life-threatening and unusual reactions,
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 as difficulty breathing or fainting. To cite an example, there have been some recorded incidents of
children
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 adversely reacting to their injections;
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, they have bolstered fears in parents that
vaccinations
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 can pose a threat to their
children
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’s health.
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, these serious symptoms or fatal cases are rare since vaccines are always tested for safety before being used on humans. Despite the minor risks involved, the idea that
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 are unnecessary is shortsighted. Thanks to vaccines,
children
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’s immune systems can build up antibodies that protect them from contracting these
diseases
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.
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, without
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, kids are at higher risk of serious illnesses
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 as measles, mumps, and rubella, which can even result in death.
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, some childhood
diseases
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, namely polio or chicken pox have been eradicated through vaccination campaigns.
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, thwarting epidemics of these common
diseases
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 helps create a safe living environment and contributes significantly to public health. In conclusion, vaccinating
children
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 will reduce their risk of contracting
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 as measles and chicken pox,
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 there are some risks after getting vaccinated. I believe that
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 have a crucial role in the development of
children
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.
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