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In the past lectures were the only method of teaching to a large number of students. Technology has brought tremendous changes in teaching method. What are the advantages and disadvantages ?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tremendous changes
  • diverse learning styles
  • enhances
  • fosters
  • continuous learning
  • digital divide
  • face-to-face interaction
  • critical thinking skills
  • over-reliance
  • potential for distraction
  • attention spans
  • infrastructure
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