Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how important New Year is to people in your country -describe how New Year is celebrated in your country -explain what you like about New Year celebration in your country Begin your letter as follows: Dear ,
Dear Sam,
It has been a
while
since we met last
time. I hope you are doing great with your study. I am writing this
letter to help you with your project regarding celebrating New Year
in my country.
New Year
is one of the biggest festivals in Japan. People take it seriously as it is the beginning of the year
, which is why people make new plans such
as what they want to achieve within the year
. We celebrate this
event with massive
amount of traditional food, which is called "Osechi Ryori". We put so much effort Add an article
a massive
the massive
on
cooking and all the relatives gather in one of their Change preposition
into
house
to eat together. Adults drink alcohol Change to a plural noun
houses
along with
nice food and we talk about how well we are doing. Some people are keen on visiting temples or shrines to pray and some ladies wear Kimono
, which Fix the agreement mistake
kimonos
is
traditional clothes for Correct subject-verb agreement
are
this
special occasion.
I enjoy seeing and having fun with my relatives with nice food and drinks. I also
like visiting a temple near my house and getting a new lucky charm so that I can feel that the new year
is going to be great for me. I hope it would
help you with your project. Wrong verb form
will
Altough
I am sure you will do great on your project, please feel free to message me anytime if you want to know more about it.
Lots of love,
HiromiCorrect your spelling
Although
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Your greeting and closing are well-executed and add a personal touch to the letter.