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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how important New Year is to people in your country -describe how New Year is celebrated in your country -explain what you like about New Year celebration in your country Begin your letter as follows: Dear ,

#friend #college #project #year #country #-say #people #-describe #-explain #celebration
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Dear Sam, It has been a
while
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 since we met
last
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 time. I hope you are doing great with your study. I am writing
this
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 letter to help you with your project regarding celebrating New
Year
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 in my country. New
Year
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 is one of the biggest festivals in Japan. People take it seriously as it is the beginning of the
year
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, which is why people make new plans
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 as what they want to achieve within the
year
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. We celebrate
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 event with
massive
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 amount of traditional food, which is called "Osechi Ryori". We put so much effort
on
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 cooking and all the relatives gather in one of their
house
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houses
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 to eat together. Adults drink alcohol
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 nice food and we talk about how well we are doing. Some people are keen on visiting temples or shrines to pray and some ladies wear
Kimono
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, which
is
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 traditional clothes for
this
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 special occasion. I enjoy seeing and having fun with my relatives with nice food and drinks. I
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 like visiting a temple near my house and getting a new lucky charm so that I can feel that the new
year
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 is going to be great for me. I hope it
would
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 help you with your project.
Altough
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Although
 I am sure you will do great on your project, please feel free to message me anytime if you want to know more about it. Lots of love, Hiromi
Submitted by hiromi.1828.o on

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task achievement
Your letter effectively addresses all parts of the task, but adding more specific examples or details could enhance the completeness of your response even further.
coherence cohesion
While the coherence and cohesion of your letter are strong, consider using more varied transitional phrases to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
You maintained a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for the task.
coherence cohesion
The information is logically structured and each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making it easy for the reader to follow.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are well-executed and add a personal touch to the letter.
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