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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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. The importance of co-education has
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controversial in recent times. Some
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 should enrol their
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 and co-educational
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 of females and males.
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 equally with respect and care by
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society.
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, it's apparent that co-educational has certainly beneficial. What is known as that half full for some may appear empty half to others. So
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 in general a trends to distinguish that parent should send their
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 to single general
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are easily distract
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 by other things.
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 had affection toward
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gender
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 which affect their performance and concentration on
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, single-sex educational institutions are more safer and comfortable, especially
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womens
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women
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why many are in favour of
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Consequentely
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, I firmly agree with the given statement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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