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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
It is true that nowadays people in societies prefer and love virtual shopping.
Therefore
, some believe that the physical market will be replaced by e-shopping.
However
, I believe that in-store shopping has its own aura and can not change in the footsteps of online shopping.
This
 essay emphasizes applying my viewpoints with valid illustrations. There are several benefits of buying stuff offline.
Firstly
, the buyer can check the quality of goods.
For instance
, it has been seen that many adults still go to local malls to try jeans or t-shirts in order to make sure the goods are comfortable and suitable.
Secondly
, some of the products still require checking personally during purchase. To be more precise, when someone shops for home decor and furniture, they prefer that it is necessary to apply a personal touch to these items to get more visual clarity in terms of shape and size.
Lastly
, it has been seen that window shopping is a good way to socialize with family, friends and relatives in today's isolated world. On the other side of the coin, I accept that online purchasing is very easy and accessible from anywhere anytime.
In addition
, buyers can get a variety of options for a particular product through one click on a computer and fast delivery options make e-commerce the most convenient way for buyers.
However
, there are so many fake websites available on the internet for shopping where hackers use shoppers' personal information and data in the wrong way.
That is
 why most people, especially old ones are still not trusting virtual purchasing. In conclusion,
although
, online purchasing has convenience to save time in
this
 fast-paced life, I believe that in-town shopping gives consumer shopping more satisfaction.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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