Even though governments have worked hard to bring about improvements in the health care system , the overall standard of physical health in developed countries is decreasing. What are the potential reasons for this and what are the some the long-trrm effects?

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The unprecedented progress of society brings along several notable notions which are interconvertible . Among them, the rising tendency of
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care is one of them. So many reasons behind
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, that government worked hard to improve
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lifestyle
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of
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declined.
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development. The
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aspect to out in
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context is that individual's eating
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they eat junk foods daily which is
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their stomach. Let us start by considering the fact, nowadays due to
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some
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make food at home so they prefer restaurants. It is indeed, a
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fact that
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children
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want to eat green vegetables.
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, A balanced diet is the secret
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a healthy body.
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, many
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nowadays rely on fast food containing excessive fat and sugar . They cause obesity, diabetes and heart
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. In order words,
overweight
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being overweight
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is a serious problem the world over,lately,especially in developed countries.
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now lead a sedentary lifestyle,
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doing
desk jobs, watching television or playing video games for long hours .
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leads to obesity and ill
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. Regular exercise is vital in maintaining
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. Exercise burns calories and builds healthy
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bones
and muscles.
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, due to
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behaviour of
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government failed to maintain
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their
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. In conclusion, according to the argument
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aforementioned above, one can reach
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conclusion that the benefit of eating fast food for
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and lack of time are instrumental indeed.
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,
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potential drawback should not be overlooked either.
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