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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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In the modern world, some
people
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 believe that
people
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 are more bonded together
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 of advanced
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.
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, others are against that opinion as
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 has separated
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 apart.
This
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first
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 opinion will be given. On the one hand, an increase in advanced
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 has played an important role in developing many new ways of communication for over a century that has made
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's life easier
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 as e-mail, social
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 platforms and online video conference tools. Those tools help
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 to stay connected with others whenever and wherever they want via the internet.
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, some individuals can make new friends or develop new relationships via social
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, while some use sms or online message service to keep texting
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, there are some disadvantages of
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 that might drive
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 apart.
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,
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 seem to have less in-person engagement as they tend to have less time spent on offline activities together, compared to the past.
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, some individuals, especially teenagers are social
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 addicts and they seem to ignore their face-to-face surrounding
people
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. To give a more specific example, some
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 are usually using their mobile phones for updating social
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 and texting friends while they are having dinner with families and they need to focus more on having conversations with their families
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 of online things. To conclude. I believe that the benefits of having
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 for communication far outweigh its drawback as it brings
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 together without the limitations of distance and time and totally changes
people
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's lives in a better way.
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 there are some concerns that it could contribute to a worse relationship, I think each individual can
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 control and find a balance in engaging between online and offline and
this
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 drawback will be no longer issue in society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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