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In many countries people are living in a throw away society where things are used for a short time and throw away. what are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to

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People
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 live in a society where things are being thrown away after a short time use in many parts of the world.
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 a lack of awareness of materials being used in making things and human negligence of the environment. Some of the major problems are land degradation and environmental changes.
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 with, One-time use products
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 a vital role in many countries.
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, the usage of polythene bags has increased numerously.
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, many products are being manufactured by undegradable plastic.
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 is happening because of human negligence on environmental effects and lack of awareness among the society.
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, many
people
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 get used to throwing used materials into rivers and seas
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 is because lack of awareness and some
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 still do
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 intentionally without considering the environmental changes.
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, Our mother Earth is in a vulnerable situation with many environmental changes. Many aquatic and land living creatures have
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 extinct
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 water pollution
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 tons of waste materials into oceans and
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 leads to land degradation and environmental effects
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 as global warming, climate change and many more.
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this
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 huge mass of ice glaciers are melting drastically. There are some reports that illustrate polar bears which have decreased in their population over the
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 10 decades and
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 is expected to get even worse. In conclusion, human activities are causing huge damage to the earth and
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 led to the extinction of many species.
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,
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 can be controlled by providing knowledge to the
people
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 who are not aware of
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 kinds of things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obsolescence
  • Consumerism
  • Sustainable practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Depletion of natural resources
  • Landfills
  • Pollution
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Social inequality
  • Marketing strategies
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