In many countries, people like to eat a wider variety of food than can be grown in their local area. As a result, much of the food people eat today has to come from other regions. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

There is an ongoing debate
whether
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eating a wider variety of
food
that can be grown in a local area has more advantages or disadvantages. In my opinion,
this
phenomenon does more good than bad to
people
. To start with, by eating different kinds of
food
,
people
get more valuable nutrients that their organisms may need. A good diet is a balanced diet, that contains different sorts of vitamins and minerals, that sometimes can only be found in exotic fruits or vegetables that do not grow locally. By eating
food
that comes from different regions, humans include more beneficial nutrients in their daily lives.
Secondly
, the export and import of
food
helps
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the area’s
economy
. By exchanging goods with the nearby communities,
people
can earn more money
that is
not from the inner circle of their
economy
, which is a big benefit to the area’s finances. So, by consuming a wider variety of
food
, and by buying things from other regions,
people
not only help their health
,
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but their
economy
as well.
However
, others may say, that consuming too much foreign
food
disadvantages local farmers.
Although
it may be partially true, it is not always the case. By that I mean, even though farmers from the local area may not always sell all the crops to the
people
from their region, they always can sell them to the regions where those kinds of crops do not grow. Another, bigger problem that comes with eating
food
that is
not grown locally, is that it might be poisonous to
people
that are not used to it.
For example
, if the community only drinks cow’s milk, but desires a higher variety of dairy
food
, they might buy camel’s milk from other countries.
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might not be very good, as it has way higher acidity than local cow’s milk and in some cases may even be poisonous to
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people
who are not used to it. To conclude, I believe, that eating more diverse
food
that is
not always grown in the local area has more crucial advantages than disadvantages.
Thus
in some
cases
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it has some minuses,
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but the
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benefits are much more advantageous, as it not only helps
people
’s health but the
economy
too.
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