The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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inclined
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that nations
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for
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morbidity
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such
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like Covid19 ,Pluge and flu.
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each other
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in
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died due to world war two ,
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that reason numerous individuals and civilians
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their life.
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various
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the governments encouraged
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philanthropist
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market .
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making more
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. As I mentioned I am of the belief that
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vital problem for
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the earth does not have
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sufficient
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sources
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middle east
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of
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inhabitants
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administration
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prepare
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adequate
food and meals for families.
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finding job is a cumbersome task for
people
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occupied
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minister
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declared
that 40
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of job seekers are not able to work in the labour market
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,
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society will
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from diverse problems
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corruption
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remorsefully
population explosion
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been considered
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a disaster for
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,and legislator should
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a suitable remedy for
this
global problem ,
also
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firmly
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conceive
that it is the most
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vital
problem that
people
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faced by that.
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