More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reason for this? What are the solutions?

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people
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of fast food and beverages which contain high
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people
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valuable and glamorous stars.
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sponsored
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international sports and other activities.
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attract to that
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Coco-cola
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by IPL and other
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Coca-cola company.
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some percentage of caffeine so, over and over time consumption would be habitual which leads to
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various
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and diet coco-cola which contain only 5% of
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to humans keep
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of
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consumed in daily life.
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