More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reason for this? What are the solutions?
Nowadays,
people
fond
of fast food and beverages which contain high Add a missing verb
are fond
sugar
, it
is extremely dangerous for their Correct pronoun usage
which
health
. I will explain various reason
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reasons
of
why Change preposition
apply
people
consume that types
of drinks
and also
give solution
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a solution
the solution
of
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for
this
solution.
To begin
with, there are many reason
of Change to a plural noun
reasons
people
consume sugar
-based drinks
. Firstly
, todays
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today's
today
advertisement
industry plays Replace the word
advertising
vital
role in every Add an article
a vital
areas
. advertisement Change to a singular noun
area
manipulate
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manipulates
people
that purchas
things and try Correct your spelling
purchase
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
Moreover
, advertisement
industry Correct article usage
the advertisement
hiring
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hires
high
valuable and glamorous stars. Replace the word
highly
Therefore
flocks thinks
that the stars Change the verb form
think
also
consumpted
these Correct your spelling
consume
types
of drinks
. Secondly
, These
soft drink Correct determiner usage
The
manufactring
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manufacturing
industry
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industries
also
invest
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invests
and
sponsored Change preposition
in and
in
international sports and other activities. Change preposition
apply
As a result
, youngster
attract to that Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
types
of drinks
. For example
, Correct article usage
the Coco-cola
Coco-cola
company Correct your spelling
Coca-Cola
sponsored
by IPL and other Add a missing verb
was sponsored
turnament
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tournament
tournaments
matchs
and the big star Salman Khan was Correct your spelling
matches
match
also
brand
Ambassador Correct article usage
a brand
to
Coca-cola company.
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of
In addition
, every soft drinks
has Fix the agreement mistake
drink
good
taste and Add an article
a good
it
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apply
contain
some percentage of caffeine so, over and over time consumption would be habitual which leads to Change the verb form
contains
health
problems.
There are
various Change the verb form
is
solution
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solutions
of
decreased Change preposition
for
consumption
of Correct article usage
the consumption
sugar
-based drinks
. Firstly
, humans should also
less consume beverages in Correct pronoun usage
their routines
routines
life and Change the noun form
routine
also
shows written contain
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content
of
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apply
sugar
in every drinks
. Change to a singular noun
drink
Secondly
, companies should manufactured
alternative options of Change the verb form
manufacture
sugar
drinks
and diet coco-cola which contain only 5% of sugar
. It is helps
to humans keep Change the verb form
helps
fit
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fitting
their
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and their
health
. Thirdly
, the government should conduct Correct article usage
a health
health
diet Replace the word
healthy
campaign
for Fix the agreement mistake
campaigns
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the awerness
awerness
of Correct your spelling
awareness
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the citizen
a citizen
citizen
.
In conclusion , Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
the
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apply
sugar
-based beverages creates
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create
lot
of Change the article
a lot
health
issues. Therefore
, human being
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beings
awer
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answer
aware
were
to
these Change preposition
of
types
of drinks
and less
consumed in daily life.Add a missing verb
are less
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