Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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trend of people seeking
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alternate
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treatments and medications rather than visiting their regular doctors. I believe
this
is a negative development.
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my opinion. On
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hand, people seek
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of treatments and medicines because of the cost and time consumed in seeing their physician.
For instance
, a patient walked into a hospital, he or she will
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through
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a lot
of
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like payment at the cashier,getting their cards or folders,checking
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vital signs and queuing, just to see the medical personnel,
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is after spending money on transportation where there could be traffic jam sometimes, which is very common among the public hospitals,
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it comes with an extra charge.
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can be discouraging for
one
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the health facility.
On the other hand
,
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source
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of treatment and medicine can cause more
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than the initial
one
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severe pain at the right iliac fossa which is an indication
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appendicitis, due to illiteracy or lack of finance,
one
may opt for
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treatment which may involve buying of pain killers to subside the pain, it
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effective but on the long run, it can cause rupture of the appendix due to the delay in getting the appropriate intervention and it's a serious surgical emergency case in the hospital,
this
could have been avoided if he visited the healthcare facility from the onset. In conclusion, the negative effects of alternative treatment
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outrageous and in
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cases,
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can cause death.
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, I think the health
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with the support of the government should help educate the masses about the dangers and
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of visiting their physician regularly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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