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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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They say “Youths of today are leaders of tomorrow”. To become a successful leader of a country in the future, one must possess not only the ability to lead a country but
also
 to have sympathy for everyone around him or her, especially apply the elderly. I strongly agree with
this
 idea and will explain why in
this
 essay. In order to achieve
such
 kind of experiences, youngsters should have participated in some voluntary
work
 held by their schools or the local town council.
Firstly
, the role of parents is crucial in
this
 case because they are the role models of their children.
Hence
, they need to take part as volunteers in any activity organised by the local community centre.
Then
 they can persuade their children to get involved in upcoming events. There are plenty of activities for our young generation to
work
 as a volunteer in our neighbourhoods.
For instance
, helping local charity concerts by checking the tickets at the entrance of the gate or by preparing some refreshments for the crowd.
However
, they shouldn't get paid in return for doing those kinds of
work
 because all these are not for money but for showing love to the community. In conclusion,
this
 type of voluntary
work
 should take place during school holidays in order to be able to organise the participants more effectively.
Finally
, by doing
this
, it could elevate the existing strength of bonding among the neighbours and community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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