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should teenagers be required to do unpaid community work? and to what extent do you aree or disagree.

#teenagers #community #work #aree
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Firstly
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lets
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let's
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 discuss
about
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whether doing
community
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work
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 is important or not. Doing
community
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work
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/services not only
it
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apply
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benifts
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benefits
 the
people
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that
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who
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 are working in terms of self-improvement, mental health,
ethical
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and ethical
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ettiquete
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etiquette
,
it
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but it
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helps
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also helps
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 the whole
community
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. you
essintially
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essentially
 are working to make the place you live in
overall
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 better. You are doing
work
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 to you and your
people
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. So generally
that is
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 a really good thing because you would be happy to see your
work
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 has
benifits
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benefits
. Which brings us to the main subject. Should teenagers be required to do unpaid
community
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work
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 in their free
time
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?
This
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 question can have
alot
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a lot
 of different opinions but
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let's
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 look at it logically,
you
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apply
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as a teenager or a kid you would only do
stuff
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 to have fun. Whether
its
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it's
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 playing video games hanging out with friends or just chilling at home. Doing
this
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 sort of
stuff
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 can only be seen as punishment. No matter how hard you would try to change his perspective, most teenagers are only going to see it one way.
On the other hand
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them
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doing
community
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work
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 will help them in so many ways that they don'
t
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 see it yet. Interacting with
people
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, learning to take care of
stuff
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,
watching
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and watching
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 over other
people
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,
it's
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are
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 all really important for your future life as a partner. Because you have to be responsible, they won'
t
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 like it. It's all seen as a dull thing in their eyes. So, knowing all of
this
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 how do
i
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 see it? Do
i
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disaggree
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disagree
 or agree
.
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 Personally in my own
experience
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experience,
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i
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 didn'
t
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 mind doing
community
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work
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 for a small period of
time
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. And that part is
important
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an important
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 "small period of
time
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". You see, you really can'
t
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doing
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do
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 something that you don'
t
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 love for a long
time
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 without a reward. In all
kind
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kinds
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 of
stuff
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 as they say "Reap what you sow" but in
this
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case
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case,
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 you're only sowing, there's nothing to be collected. So
i
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 think teenagers should be paid for them to
atleast
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at least
 know how it feels to be rewarded for
your
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their
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 own
work
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. In conclusion,
i
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 think
this
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tapic
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topic
 can have an endless discussion
due to
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 how many
people
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 and many different ages can elaborate on
this
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 topic and have different opinions.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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