Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.
In what ways has technology affected the types of relation people make?
Has that become a positive or negative development?

In the current generation, interacting and contacting
people
couldn't have been any easier. Not only you can reach
people
in seconds, but they can
also
be around you all the time. But with great ,advantages there are
also
great disadvantages.
Firstly
, let us go back a few centuries to get an idea
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society used to interact with each other. Previously, when you wanted to go out with a Friend you would meet him so you can plan out when and where you were planning to do.
Nowdays
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, you
simple
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just need his number
send
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and send
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him a letter to see if your Friend whats to
hangout
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or not. Which is a really convenient thing for other occasions.
For example
, asking a Family member for groceries, calling your
work place
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for being sick, the list can go on and on. But here's where the convenience could go
to
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the opposite direction. Having
less
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reasons to go outside and having a whole world at your hands made the Community very isolated. It made
people
see normal activities
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boring because it's not
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you the attention and dopamine that scrolling through social media apps gives. How
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did it affect the relationships?
Alot
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A lot
. Because you can reach out to almost everyone in seconds
people
have seemed to lose interest in interacting. In conclusion, Having faster ways to interact with
people
doens't
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doesn't
make it
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better
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what
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it used to be before technology.
Infact
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In fact
, it made it worse. It's really difficult
nowdays
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to have a stable relationship due
how
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Mobile phones ruined our generation.
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