Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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animals
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to us and their natural surroundings means protecting biodiversity.
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on wild beast
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due to poverty as well as they do not have any kind of knowledge about
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institution
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merits of having
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foremost and it is good for
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waste wealth on their protection yet, the high regime ought to
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more salary on more facilities in light of the
fact
that
that is
more essential rather than wild
animals
.
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