Today, some people think that universities should accept equal numbers of female and male in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the present day, many people believe that males and females should be accepted equally in
universities
, especially in every subject.
However
, some doubt
this
policy idea.
This
essay will discuss both sides as well as my view as well. Many people think that
universities
should have
women
and
men
in the same number.
This
is because people may want to have a
gender equal
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society. As the former, more males are educated than
women
which
affects
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the power of
men
.
Such
power makes
women
have no choice rather than
accepting
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men
's rules.
For example
, they have to do
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the house
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house work
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or if their husbands have an affair, they can do nothing. To tackle
this
problem,
women
must be independent. They have to study in
universities
and have their own salaries to avoid
such
men
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power. Those who disagree feel that
this
policy is unacceptable. Their reason is that the policy has
an
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unfair criteria. Everybody should have a chance to apply and be accepted
for
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any
universities
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and any
subjects
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subject
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no matter what gender they are. To set
this criteria
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, it indicates an inequality system.
For instance
, there are many companies that recruit their employees without knowing their gender, age and house location to avoid
a
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bias. In conclusion, having examined the two views, my opinion is that we should not accept two genders equally in
universities
and subjects.
This
is because we want an equal system for society.
Moreover
, if we only accept those who get good scores,
universities
would produce excellent students in
the
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society as well.
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