In some countries, secondary school aims to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

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problematic area of any country and many
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of it. Some nations
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on many subjects is essential in
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few contradict it. After careful consideration, I recommend confining down the number of topics to be trained in high
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. An early start of learning skills aid pupils to gain expertise and prepare them for speedy joining
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major companies.
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point, students should be allowed to study
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themes relative to necessary crafts for the development of a particular nation. For example,
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should contain a topic list of computers , software development ,
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. The outcome would be a product equipped with capacity for employers. Apart from making scholars ready for
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, constraints on subjects provide other benefits as well. One of the utmost
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allow enough period to focus on supplementary talents e.g., enhancing communication, presentation capability ,
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overall personality growth.
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, few of the school children cannot concentrate on numerous options and prefer a controlled selection of matters. It motivates them to centralize their effort on
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artefacts to decide the policy for
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of subjects provides ample
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for scholars alongside tailoring them for services.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broad foundation
  • well-rounded individuals
  • critical thinking skills
  • adaptability
  • specialized skills
  • job readiness
  • interconnected world
  • global economy
  • flexibility
  • pivot between careers
  • future-proofing
  • automation
  • transferable skills
  • holistic development
  • explore various interests
  • economic structure
  • workforce demands
  • local context
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