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In some countries, secondary school aims to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

#countries #school #education #range #subjects #children #focus #career #today’s #world
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topmost
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 problematic area of any country and many
educationist
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, employers considered
lack
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 of appropriate tutoring during high
schools
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 as
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the roots
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roots
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 of it. Some nations
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 that
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 on many subjects is essential in
schools
however
 few contradict it. After careful consideration, I recommend confining down the number of topics to be trained in high
schools
. An early start of learning skills aid pupils to gain expertise and prepare them for speedy joining
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major companies.
Hence
 considering the
above stated
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 point, students should be allowed to study
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 themes relative to necessary crafts for the development of a particular nation. For example,
a
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nation with
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 technology sector in
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 stage,
institute
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 should contain a topic list of computers , software development ,
networking
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 only
instead
 of bombarding kids with
a
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huge
selections
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. The outcome would be a product equipped with capacity for employers. Apart from making scholars ready for
future
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, constraints on subjects provide other benefits as well. One of the utmost
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 allow enough period to focus on supplementary talents e.g., enhancing communication, presentation capability ,
acquiring
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 new
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 traits for
an
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overall personality growth.
Subsequently
, few of the school children cannot concentrate on numerous options and prefer a controlled selection of matters. It motivates them to centralize their effort on
few
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a few
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 things
hence
 upright scores in exams. In conclusion, countries need to assess the current affairs,
future
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and future
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 stand and
then
 consider
above mentioned
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 artefacts to decide the policy for
schools
. In nutshell,
containment
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 of subjects provides ample
pro
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 for scholars alongside tailoring them for services.
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