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The table provides a comparison of people in four different countries in
years
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 2003, 2025 and 2050. From an overall perspective, it is evident that the Indonesian population is by far the highest of
five
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the five
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 given countries.
In addition
, while Indonesia and Argentina are expected to see their populations rise significantly, Italy is projected to witness a decline in its population. At the beginning of the period, the
number
 of people in Indonesia was
highest
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the highest
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, at 238
millions
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, followed by Italy and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea, at 54
millions
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million
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 and 48
millions
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million
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 respectively. Argentina accounted
the
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 lowest
number
, only 34
millions
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million
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. In the period from 2003 to 2050, the
number
 of people in Indonesia is expected to rise considerably, to 312
millions
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million
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.
Similarly
, Argentina is
also
 predicted to see an increase in its population.
By contrast
, the
number
 of Italians is expected to fall gradually, to only 45
millions
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. The figure for
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea will be unchanged over the period supplied.
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