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some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. discuss both sides and give your own opinion

#feel #cities #functionality
In
this
 modern era,
cities
 have
a
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better infrastructure and more job
opporunities
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opportunities
. Many
people
 like to settle live in
cities
.
However
, some
people
 think that
cities
 should be decorated to be beautiful while other
people
agrue
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argue
agree
 that infrastructure is paramount in form of education, hospital and many more. from my perspective, the latter statement
appear
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 to be rational.In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on the beneficial and adverse aspects of
this
 thread and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. There is
adaquete
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adequate
 evidence to obtainable
the
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substantial reasons. The top-notch concrete reason is tourism is the backbone of
country's
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 economy.
Therefore
,
construct
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 the building more impressive,
enchance
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enhance
the
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 beauty
of
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the
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building which
encourage
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number
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a number
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 of visitors to come to
these
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this
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 place.
For instance
, Dubai is the
top-tourists
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top-tourist
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 place in the world due to
skyscrappers
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skyscrapers
, craved stone brick houses and many more. What is known as half full for some may appear
empty
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as empty
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 half for some
.
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 So
people
 in general
trend
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tend
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 to distinguish that
functionaly
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functionality
functionally
 is more important. Many
people
comes
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 to
cities
 for job opportunities and they like to settle in the
cities
.
Therefore
, Education and Health sector is
the
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 essential part of
survial
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survival
 in the world. Without proper basic functionalities, it's difficult to run the countries which directly affect
the
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industrialization.
Hence
, it's apparent why many
people
 are in favour of tread. To sum up, choose wisely based on the place and
requirement
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requirements
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. To cite an example, Developed countries should focus
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on enchance
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enchance
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enhance
 beauty of the city because already basic functionalities
such
 as transport are
avaliable
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available
.
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