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There is an increasing population on the planet, and people are running out of water, food, and fuel. To what consequences may
overpopulation
 lead? In your opinion, what measures can be taken to fight
overpopulation
? As the population on Earth grows, people are facing a shortage of water, food and fuel.
Overpopulation
 may lead to detrimental effects
such
 as over-cultivation, over-grazing, deforestation, overhunting, overfishing and more pollution. In my opinion, these
problems
 can be overcome by government policy and a good education system. On the one hand,
overpopulation
 has many negative outcomes. As the number of individuals increases around the world, the demand for food, water and fuel
also
 becomes unsustainable. Many landscapes have been deforested for a new residential area.
Moreover
, due to over-consumption, foods are changed by a genetic mutation to grow fast which makes them unhealthy for human bodies.
On the other hand
, if the drawbacks of
overpopulation
 are taught at schools, it is likely to have more conscious generations regarding the increasing population dilemma.
For example
, Greta Thunberg made the young generation more aware of environmental
problems
. With a good education, we may have more youngsters who think critically about the present
problems
.
In addition
, governments across the world can take measures for reducing the
overpopulation
 problem
such
 as making campaigns for birth control and policies. To conclude,
overpopulation
 brings undeniable
problems
 regarding over-consumption, over-grazing, deforestation and so on. To tackle these
problems
, the government should take responsibility and a good education system should be a priority.
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