Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Successful
sports
professionals
salary is one of the most contradictive Change noun form
professionals'
professional's
topic
. Change to a plural noun
topics
People
who are really successful in this
area have outstanding revenues, so many people
strongly believe that it is not normal that sports
have bigger salaries than other important specialties
. Another part of Change the spelling
specialities
the
society thinks oppositely that sportsmen’s wages are fully justified.
On the one hand, Correct article usage
apply
sports
professionals
could bring more money
to the big brands by their popularity, so huge brands suggest high paid
advertisement contracts to the sportsmen. Add a hyphen
high-paid
This
cooperation could bring advantages for all members of the contract, companies receive revenues from improvement
of their products' sales, and Add an article
the improvement
sports
professionals
get well paid
contracts. Add a hyphen
well-paid
For instance
, Cristiano Ronaldo’s deal with Nike is important for both sides, Nike receives a big star , who will be part of their advertisement
company , while Ronaldo has outstanding revenue. Replace the word
advertising
Moreover
, watching sports
could make us happier and sport is great entertainment for which people
are prepared to pay big money
.
On the other hand
, there are others
Correct pronoun usage
other
specialties
, which are essential for Change the spelling
specialities
people
's health or education, which earn significantly less money
for their vital job. For example
, doctors earn smaller amounts of money
, who
help Correct word choice
and
people
Change noun form
people's
lifes
. According to Correct your spelling
lives
this
fact
many Add a comma
,fact
people
do not understand why it happens. Furthermore
, many people
think that sports
professionals
are not educated so well to earn such
a massive amount of money
, because sportsmen spend a significant amount of time on their training.
To sum up, from my point of view sportsmen’s high salaries are justified,
because they bring bigger revenue for their employers and are part of massive entertainment.Remove the comma
apply
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