Some people say that the best way to improve roads safety would be to increase minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motobikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In response to the alarmingly high rate of
traffic
accidents
, some
people
think that we should increase the legal driving
age
.
Although
I think
this
solution can be somewhat beneficial, it is not effective in general.
Firstly
, lifting the legal driving
age
will increase pressure on public transport systems and parents to accommodate
this
sudden surplus of
people
without a driving license.
For example
, raising the driving
age
from 18 to 21 means tens of thousands of
people
will not be able to drive.
As a result
, more buses, taxis, and other urban public transport means must be put into use, or parents will have to continue driving their children around.
Secondly
, the most common causes of
traffic
accidents
are drinking while driving and driving in the wrong lanes. These have little to do with the legal driving
age
but more with driving etiquette.
Therefore
, increasing the legal driving
age
could do more harm than good for society.
However
, I can
also
understand why some
people
would advocate for
this
idea.
Firstly
, by lifting the minimum driving
age
, driving schools will have more time to educate young adults on road safety, leading to future generations driving more carefully.
For example
, currently, if you want to get a driving license, most
people
do not attend a driving school. They only need to take a quiz and a driving test. That certainly can be improved.
Secondly
, it is evident that some
traffic
accidents
also
occur due to immature decisions,
such
as hosting races or riding a motorbike with more than two
people
. Lifting the minimum
age
can help to reduce these short-sighted behaviours. In conclusion, despite some potential benefits that lifting the legal driving
age
can bring to society, I still think that
this
solution can do little to prevent
traffic
accidents
in Vietnam.
Submitted by nhuminh031001 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: