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Writing Samples
Band 7

You recently stayed at your friend's place, to look after the house while he/she is away. You accidentally damaged something in his/her house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: describe what the accident was explain when it happened suggest how the damage can be fixed.

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Dear Yash, I hope you are doing absolutely fantastic! I am writing
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 letter to apologize for the damage, I did by mistake in your home when you were out of town. I was working in the kitchen and I accidentally broke the juicer by dropping it down on the floor. It was around 10 Am in the Morning and I was busy on the phone
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 making my protein shake, my hands were a little oily because I was frying some eggs
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 the pan.
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, the juicer slipped out of my hands when I tried to handle it and fell on the surface.
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, without being sorry, I have nothing else to fix it, I know it was an expensive one and you are always taking care of every item of the household, If you want I can transfer the exact amount of the juicer that you can buy the new one. I look forward to your response. Yours Truly, Vairag

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tone
Try to more clearly express your feelings of regret and responsibility for the damage caused. This can enhance the tone of your apology.
cohesion
Consider restructuring your paragraphs to include one clear idea per paragraph – for example, separate the description of the accident from your suggestion to resolve it.
coherence
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors. For example, 'I did by mistake' could be more plainly stated as 'I accidentally did'.
tone
The letter conveys a genuine tone of apology, which is important in this context.
content
The description of the accident is vivid and provides a clear image of what happened.
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Your willingness to compensate for the damage shows responsibility and thoughtfulness.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accidentally
  • unfortunately
  • damaged
  • sincere apologies
  • repair
  • replace
  • compensation
  • responsibility
  • solution
  • gesture of goodwill
  • inconvenience
  • professional service
  • unintentional
  • voucher
  • out of pocket
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