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The given bar graph illustrates the amount of renewable
energy
in the total supply in 2000, 2004 and 2007 for
Australia
,
Germany
,
Norway
and
Iceland
. The following details can be observed from the given bar graph.
Norway
has the highest
percentage
of renewable
energy
in all the three given periods, followed by
Iceland
, whereas
Australia
has the lowest
percentage
. In 2000,
Norway
had the highest renewable
energy
with 62% followed by
Iceland
with only 10% less renewable
energy
. Whereas,
Australia
and
Germany
had only 10% and 12% renewable
energy
. Following a similar trend in 2004,
Norway
rose to 4% of renewable
energy
than the previous year and
Germany
had a 5% increase and
Australia
had a 2% increase respectively. Interestingly
Iceland
had a 7% increase in renewable
energy
which was the highest in 2004 of any country in the given graph.
Moreover
, in 2007
Norway
saw a significant boost with 78% and
Germany
increased to 17%. But
Iceland
and
Australia
saw a decline in renewable
energy
with 55% and 9% respectively
lowest
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percentage
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percentages
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.
Hence
,
Norway
had the highest
percentage
of renewable
energy
whereas
Australia
 had the lowest
percentage
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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