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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, in the evolutionary
age
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 we are living in, a lot of technologies
surrounds
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 us, in order to make everything accessible and easy to reach. The future plans predict that after
few
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 years, there will be no need for printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
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book
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books
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, and everything we need will be online and free to obtain. I personally can tell that the presence of actual
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book
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books
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 and newspapers is vital and essential and cannot be ignored.
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this
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 process. On the one hand, having online and free
access
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 to any
data
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 we need is totally important, as it produces the availability of
data
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 anytime needed,
besides
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access
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it anywhere only if has internet
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, or even a cellphone or laptop. All
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 is a result of the
technology
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 development which
make
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 everything happened around us digitalized in
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forms
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 of texts and videos. For
instant
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, now and even more in future, you can log into social media or blogs and websites,
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then
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and then
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 you can easily download any
book
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 you need or read everything
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 around the whole world
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 by
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. So, if I had everything in my hand, why would I
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 myself paying for actual books or newspapers
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, having these types of
data
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 which can be physically obtained is totally necessary and there is a lot of
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depends
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that depends
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 on it. Obtaining books and newspapers can
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 in developing the
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 character and building his personality.
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 happens because the brains react
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 physical abject more than the digital
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. It
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 helps in strengthen our memory,
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reading and comprehension skills.
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,
the
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famous and successful people, we find them recommend for us reading
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a book
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book
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books
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 rather than watching videos and spend time on
internet
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the internet
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.
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 way of thinking should be printed in everyone's mind about how we should think. To sum up,
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 online
data
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 has many benefits
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access
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, which can make us
in
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no need for different types of papers, there are drawbacks which outweigh the personal and social role
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this
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 process. My personal opinion is that,
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 technology can help in many different aspects of our life, we have to always consider the effect and value of
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 which
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 who we actually are.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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