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Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programs. Others think that it is better to produce these locally.

#people #country #culture #import #movies #tv #programs
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producation
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production
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perform
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culture
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, everyone shows to different
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tradition and
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. Some individuals think
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international
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Although
, other
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societies
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 argued that it is good to
produces
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 in local areas of
movies
 and
TV
programmes
. I will discuss
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both points of
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 and give my opinion in the ensuing paragraphs. On the one hand , nowadays, everyone
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learns
 about culture and history from
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movies
 and
TV
programmes
. The film industry has
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histroy
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history
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traditions
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 of
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an ancestor
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, in the
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modern
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children
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 to technology, so, they learn from textbooks or story books that they can not
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easily
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documentary, it
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easly
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easily
 and they know about
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the histroy
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histroy
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history
 of different countries.
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, when
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foreign
movies
 and
TV
programmes
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releas
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release
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that
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 showed
advancement
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the advancement
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 of technology in
perticular
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particular
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For example
, 'The Marvel
Movies
'
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shows
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 technology
which
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used in these
movies
'
chracters
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characters
.
On the other hand
, other
community
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communities
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 argued that it is good to produce
in
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the
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local
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locally
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.
However
, there
manifold
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 film industry present
in
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apply
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locally because of
lack
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 of funding.
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,
country's
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the country's
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 diversity can not see other
region
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regions
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 folks.
For instance
, the North-Korea can not
bordcast
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broadcast
 their drama
in
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on
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 the international platform. Because
of
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people do not know of antecedents and
tradition
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traditions
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. People
are
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learn
past
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the past
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, culture and languages of other
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nations
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by
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the
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movies
 and
TV
programmes
. In conclusion, there
are
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variouse
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various
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unterstand
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understand
 the diversity of
region
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the region
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, but, the main way to know about country's lifestyle in the
movies
 and television series. For
in
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this
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these
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reasons
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 my opinion
stand
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 with the former point of
views
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