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Nowadays many people aim to create a balance between their work and other aspects of their life, however, only a few achieve it. What are the problems in doing this and what solutions can you suggest?

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Today, everyone has
hectic
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schedual
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schedule
 of their
work
 so, it is hard to every to maintain
work
 and
life
to
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apply
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balance
.
Although
, some
people
are easily manage
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easily manage
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both
part
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parts
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 of
life
. There are creat manifold problems in
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.
Therefore
, I will
expalin
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explain
 the situation and
also
 give
solution
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a solution
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of
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this
issues
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issue
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.
To begin
 with, there
are
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is
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 various
problem
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problems
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to
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with
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 managing
work
-
life
balance
. Day by day inflation has
been
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increased.
Hence
,
people
work
 hard and
doing
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do
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 2 to 3 jobs
for
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to
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 feed their family and
lives
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live
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 a better
life
.
As a result
, folks can not manage their personal
life
.
Moreover
, doing multiple jobs which
increas
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increases
work load
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workload
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of
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on
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both
 companies and they can not
balance
their
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them
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both
work
.
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Consequently
, a person would be depressed and it will create health issues
such
 as heart disease, diabetes and other serious problems.
Likewise
, these
days
,
the
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apply
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divorce case has
rise
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 to
this
 situation because
,
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apply
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 a person can not give their
time
 in
relationship
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a relationship
the relationship
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.
For example
, in India, 55%
divorce
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of divorce
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case
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cases
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 in
everyday
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. Apart from that 25%
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of case
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case
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cases
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 of
this
issues
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issue
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. There
are
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also
nuberous
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numerous
solution
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solutions
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of
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to
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this
 problem.
Firstly
,
people
are maintain
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maintain
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 their
work
 hours and other
time
 spend
to
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with
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 their family and friends.
Secondly
, everyone
make
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makes
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 a rule in
the
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apply
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life
 for their better
fature
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future
feature
that is
 doing
work
in
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within
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time
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the time
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 limit.
For instance
, the
reseacher
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researcher
experiment
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experimented
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 on two
group
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groups
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in that
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that
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where
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 the company give
same
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the same
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taske
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task
taste
take
 to
both
group
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groups
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and
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apply
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one
group
 have 3
days
 to
complate
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complete
 their
work
 and another
group
have
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had
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 7
days
 to finish
work
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their work
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. In
this
siuation
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situation
 give
result
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the result
a result
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of
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apply
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that
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that person
those people
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people
 who
work
on
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for
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 3
days
,
it
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apply
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was neither
accrate
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accurate
 nor well
design
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.
However
, other folks did
work
 with well
accqracy
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accuracy
 and well design.
Besides
, when
people
doing
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do
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work
 with their
time
 duration without any burden
that is
 too perfect. In conclusion, it is important to
equillibrium
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equilibrium
life
 and
work
-
life
. It is too hard
to
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for
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 everyone, while, there
are
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is
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 various
solution
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solutions
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of
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to
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balance
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balancing
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 professional and relation between family and friends.
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