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An increasing number of people of all ages are getting information from electronic products, and some people tend to argue printed books as well as magazines are no longer needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Unquestionably, the majority of
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 today is kept online, rather than in actual
books
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 as it was once.
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, the validity of physical
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 has been called into question.
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, I believe printed
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 will continue to) serve a crucial function in our lives and society that cannot be replaced.
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, storing
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 online encourages a dependency on computer technology
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 bad for the human mind and critical thinking. In the past, if someone wanted to
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 more about a subject, they would have to check out
books
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 from a library or consult an expert.
People
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 were more diligent and patient in their learning, which they painstakingly obtained from a variety of resources,
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 as
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, specialists, and other informed
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, despite the fact that
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 process was
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sluggish and subject to bias. Nowadays, most
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 read brief articles, hastily written to attract more clicks and generate advertising revenue.
Moreover
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, it is easy to be distracted by other
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 or messages. These appeal to a basic human impulse to be entertained and joyful at all times. Over time,
this
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 has led to an addiction to devices and a lack of beneficial habits developed through rigorous research and study.
Although
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 there are millions of
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 on the market, certain old manuscripts cannot be converted into digital formats. Because of
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, even though e-
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 are vivid and colourful, they cannot have the same effect on bookworms as traditional
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.
Furthermore
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, paper
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 are more practical than electronic
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 since blind
people
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 must read with their hands and are unable to do so with electronic
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. Printed materials,
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 some, are more intriguing and pleasurable, and they don't cause eye problems. When a child asks to read a story,
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, parents can give
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 rather than a phone because kids might play a game
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 of reading an e-book. In conclusion, despite the popularity of portable devices and the handiness of online
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, I firmly hold the opinion that the
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 obtained from
books
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 is often more reliable and printed
books
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 are still necessary to store knowledge and spread wisdom.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Cost-effective
  • Tactile experience
  • Screen fatigue
  • Credibility
  • Rigorous editing
  • Fact-checking
  • Overhead costs
  • Physical storage space
  • Updated instantaneously
  • Remote areas
  • Prolonged screen time
  • Digital consumption
  • Paper waste
  • Tactile experience
  • Eye strain
  • Reliability
  • Misleading
  • Digital devices
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