Nowadays many young people leave home at an early age and live in a city. Why do you think they move to cities? Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for young people?

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At present, the young generation is moving toward urbanized cities and settling because of their developed facilities and opportunities. Personally, I believe
this
trend has greater advantages.
Firstly
, towns are composed of improved infrastructure where citizens have excellent roads, hospitality services and quality education.
This
leads to greater career opportunities in the future.
For example
, people struggling for a permanent job can be guided and involved in vocational training programs leading to a fixed profession with no educational degree.
Moreover
, living alone makes individuals more mature because they will have to face challenges by themselves, solutions must be created unaccompanied. So they gain knowledge and experience themselves.
Also
, they will have to work extremely hard to be financially stable and cover daily expenses. Ultimately, leading to emotional and physical maturity.
On the other hand
, the family relationships and bonds are diminished.
Due to
the long distance and busy pace in life, they lack time to communicate regularly.
Additionally
, individuals lack support economically and personally.
For instance
, when he or she is severely ill, no one will be at the side to support and take care eventually, leading towards bankruptcy.
Furthermore
, the experience, ideas and advice which grandparents had gathered remain unknown to grandchildren
where
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they will suffer in similar situations. In conclusion, even though youngsters lose relationships with family and face difficulties by oneself
however
,
this
makes them more mature, have job satisfaction and live a comfortable luxurious life with enormous facilities. And leaving the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Submitted by Witharana Senesh Rasinda Wickramasinghe on

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