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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss these two views and give your opinion.

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consider
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sport
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equipments
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 a perfect way of improving people's general
health
. Some
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otherwise
 and count on other factors too.
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views
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 will be discussed below and end with a personal belief. There are certain activity-based tools which can be installed for public
utalize
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utilize
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this
 case, these kinds of
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 support all ages of communities (like specialized bikes for everyone in Switzerland),
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 will be encouraged to use them and be seen as
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role
model
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 to others.
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, being active can be prescribed by professionals to avoid increasing
health
 problems nowadays. Another effect might be the tendency of
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 workers to try
exersicing
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exercising
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 any hour of their occupied day.
Although
availability
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 of the
sport
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 places can be astonishingly impressive, some of them are pricy and common individuals can not purchase them freely. Because of
this
, some ignore body movements and
other
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others
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 might choose the cheaper kinds.
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 we can mention enormous
different
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 types of options which affect public
health
 like food and housing, which are neglected consistently in most countries. As we can witness obesity can kill quicker than poverty and malnutrition by comparing developed countries (American states) to developing ones (African cities). Overall, I believe as long
societies
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 are thriving in economic and
technology
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 matters, the
neccecity
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necessity
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selfcare
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self-care
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 is growing inevitably. Governments and private sections should invest
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on
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 public
health
 more and more by providing
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sports
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sports
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sport
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sports
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equipment
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equipment
equipments
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equipment
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 after taking care of
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 needs of humanity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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