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Some people believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high Level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

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There have been arguments about salaries' policy. Some
people
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 believe that physical workers and
people
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 with high-level degrees should be paid the same amount,
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, I respectfully disagree with
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 statement. In
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 essay, I will illustrate my point of view and support it with examples as well.
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 of all, from my perspective, I think that everyone should get paid according to their work accomplishment not based on their college
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 whatsoever.
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, it would be completely unfair to pay all employees the same cash, not considering the time-table differences and the achievements that have been done by each one of them. In fact, not everyone takes his job seriously, some
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 work as hard as they can and devotes their time in order to build their career and self-development, but on the hand, some of them could not care less about their job performance. There are things that financial officials should consider before paying any employee. A high-level
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 is not enough.
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, a lot of
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 worked hard in the past few years, and after getting their Master's or PhD degrees they hang them on the wall inside their house but never actually worked with them. Your past achievement is appreciated of course but not enough, it is 'what type of person you are' not where. What is the purpose of having a high-level
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 if you will not be working with it? In conclusion, I believe that everyone should be paid based on their performance ,not their college
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 or past accomplishments and achievements.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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