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Every year several language die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages. To what extent do u agree or disagree with this opinion.

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an increasing concern for many people around the world is fewer
languages
 are good
rather
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than several
languages
. There are those who believe that fewer
languages
 should
have remained
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remain
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 so that life will be easier in the world compared with lots of
languages
, which is not necessary. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and provide my
overall
 opinion. Generally speaking, there are two main reasons why people believe that fewer
languages
 are good on
this
 earth. Perhaps the main reason why the public is in favour of
this
 is necessary is because to acquire other
languages
 easily except their mother tongue.
For example
, if people know at least three, or four
languages
 they may be able to understand other nations' expressions and linguistics as well, which will help them to accumulate extra knowledge about other cultures' lives.
Further
, most public's brains don't have much ability to store more than two
languages
. So, it
is
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 useful for those humans if fewer
languages
 remained in the world. Despite these arguments, there is
also
 a case for the idea that
languages
 show the reality of our ancient lives.
This
 is because different types of
languages
 make us different from others.
However
, there are so many countries that are trying to save the
languages
 that are passing out. why not actually,
this
 reflects the image of sacrifices given by their ancestors. in conclusion, it must be said that the importance of
languages
 has become a complex issue with no easy solution. But my opinion is that humans have to try more than fewer
languages
, in that
way
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 humans can gather so much more knowledge than one language.
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