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Reporting of crimes and other kinds of violent news on television and in newspapers can have adverse consquences. This kind of information should be restricted from being shown in the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Crimes and violent
news
 have been
broadcasting
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 in newspapers and TV channels for decades.
Although
 there are many
people
 who believe that those kinds of crimes and other related
news
 should not be reported on any kind of media platform. I strongly agree that those types of
news
 should be declared on television and in journals because the positive effects of doing so outweigh the drawbacks and I am going to explain why in
this
 essay. On the one hand, some
people
 think that declaring the
news
 of a violent case could help the
suspect
 from escaping his action and
also
 put the police forces in a difficult situation
on
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 finding that person.
For example
, sharing information about a murderer with the community could be able to gain the
advantages
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advantage
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 of hiding or running away from being caught by the
suspect
.
However
, by reporting that
news
 on the media and with the help of law-abiding citizens, the
suspect
 will not be able to hide or run for so long.
On the other hand
, many
people
 including me, are against the idea that
such
 kind of
news
 should be banned from being shown in the media.
For instance
, someone hit and ran on a highway in the middle of the night and there was no single eyewitness and the only clue was a broken part of the front lights of a car. In
this
 case, the police will definitely need help from
people
 to take part in
this
 investigation.
In addition
, sharing the identity of that broken piece of front light in newspapers and on television could ring someone's bell.
However
, too many details about the person who committed the crime could have negative consequences. To conclude, from my point of perspective, broadcasting the basic information about the
suspect
 on TV and in newspapers should not be restricted as it brings more advantages than disadvantages.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • apathetic
  • heightened sense
  • anxiety
  • restricting
  • panic
  • rumor spreading
  • censoring
  • infringe
  • freedom of the press
  • informed public
  • precautions
  • policies
  • balance
  • broadcasting
  • sensitive content
  • exposure level
  • educational content
  • constructive approach
  • societal issue
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