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ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in recent years despite the potential harmful effects they may have on our health and on society.govt should introduce measures to restrict ownership of moblie phones to those who need them for their work. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is rightly suggested that the increase in mobile use has risen to a pinnacle in recent times.
People
 are more engrossed in mobiles despite knowing the facts of what kind of damage they can do.
However
, if the government sets a few regulations, will that limit
people
 from using them? In my opinion, I believe that it would not be wise to restrict
people
 from their right to access basic necessities like mobile devices.
Firstly
, it is argued that phones are causing harm to
people
 in varied ways.
In other words
,
this
 may point out ; the radiation that these are emitting which might affect one's health.
However
, it is quite obvious that we are living in an era of technological advancements where we are surrounded by gadgets most of the time and, restricting the usage of these might not reduce the potential disbenefits that tech gadgets can cause. Despite the fact , many studies have proved that not every device will emit radiation, the government should set rules for manufacturing companies to maintain safety rather than control the
people
.
Moreover
, it is generally argued that phones are causing a negative impact on society. To illustrate
further
, humans are seen to spend most of their time on these devices and as a
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result they directly or indirectly tend to ignore families and friends.
This
 behaviour could turn out to affect the close-knitted circle.
Although
 considering all the facts, one should not undermine the benefits of using the phone for personal use as
this
 helps
people
 to maintain their connections with families and extended families who live abroad and they can access a multitude of things just by sitting at home.
Therefore
, it would not be a wise decision to limit the usage of the phone just for work and not for personal use. On balance, for the aforementioned reasons, I strongly disagree with the idea of limiting the usage of mobiles just for work.
On the other hand
, the government can spread awareness among the
people
 regarding the harm that these gadgets can cause and leave it to the autonomy of
people
 regarding what to choose for themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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