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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns .while other believe housing facilities should be built instead. Do agree or disagree?

#trees #environment #people #area #cities #towns #facilities
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Air
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 pollution on the earth is now at its highest alert so planting
trees
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 is crucial to protect the environment. Some
people
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 think that vacant areas should be a place to plant
trees
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instead
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 of building housing facilities, but others disagree. I agree with the former idea and will explain it
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 in the following two paragraphs. Plants are known to reduce
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 pollution and give us oxy. Due to human needs, many forests and
trees
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 are destroyed and used to support human life. More and more factories and buildings appear and cause the
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 quality to get worse. Without
trees
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, most of the dust, CO2,.. will stay with
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 for a long time.
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,
people
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 will be affected by the
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 and become sick. If we continue building house facilities, there will be no place for
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 giving us oxy, the things that we can not live in if we do not have it.
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, plants can increase
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's creativity and reduce stress. Scientists
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 proved that staying in a place with
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, flowers, and plants will help
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's brains relax and produce much more new things.
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 that, it can reduce the number of mental health problems for
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 worldwide. Patients have been shown to recover faster from surgery when their hospital room has a view of
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. In conclusion, I believe that we should plant more
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 to protect ourselves and our earth. The
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 generation should have a chance to stay with nature and enjoy the benefits of
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, not the wall.
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