Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think the education will not work. Disscuss both views and give your opinion.

Consuming unhealthy
food
can give a negative impact towards health. There are two sides
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this
problem, some
people
think that
education
will help to
change
this
lifestyle while the
other
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others
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think that it is useless to inform
people
about the importance of eating healthy
food
or home-made cook because
people
mostly will be ignorant and keep swallowing
junk
food
.
Hence
, I will deliver these both sides and tell my opinion after that.
People
who believe that
education
is the most important thing to
change
people
's behaviour have the perspective that with
the
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sustainable
education
, the number of
people
who eat
junk
food
will be decreased because they have been told
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many times about the impact of consuming
food
with low nutrients
such
as fried chicken and pizza.
Moreover
, it is significant to tell them the impact
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eating fruits and vegetables since it can give stamina during daily activities.
For example
, having a balance between
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lifestyle and healthy
food
can help nurture
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for
people
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the
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50 and above to look more young and powerful. Meanwhile, not
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people
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that
education
can not prevent society to stop consuming
food
without having vegetables on the side of their plate. These
people
believe that
education
just gives help for informing, but not trying to
change
people
.
For instance
, parents might tell their children to have a good quality of sleep by going to bed after 10 p.m. and their children will just not pay attention unless parents force them to do it.
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being said that if you want to shift
people
's
habit
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on
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eating
food
, try to make a regulation on restaurants for the calories that they use for producing
food
. It can be helpful to make
people
understand how
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calories on
junk
food
that they eat and it can stop them from eating
junk
food
. To conclude, I strongly agree with the importance of
education
as the way to
change
people
to become better. By telling
people
that they can balance their
junk
food
with other healthy
food
,
people
will gradually start to think that it is beneficial to reduce the amount of unhealthy
food
and swift that to
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healthy one.
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