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The best way to reduce crime among youngsters is to teach parents good parenting skills. Do you agree or disagree.

#crime #youngsters #parents #skills
Around the world, There is a belief that if
parents
 provide good motivations and morals
then
youngesters
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youngsters
 can be done
less
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 crimes.
In addition
 to
this
 Good parenting
also
 improve
youth
 bad behaviour.I totally agree that good Parenting plays a
huge
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 significant
impact
in
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on
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youth
mindset
 with
resept
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respect
 to bad
mindset
. In analysing the Capabilities of inbuilt
qualities
 of
Parents
 and
teachers
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teachers'
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role
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, as well as
Guidence
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Guidance
 given to
parents
 by the public and private organizations.
Firstly
,
Youth
 can be motivated by the
parents
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parent's
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 and
teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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sugestions
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suggestions
.In
general
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 before teaching
the
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direct books knowledge to
children
teachers
has
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 to motivate
first
 with different points if required with practical examples of how to live and acquire
the
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good
qualities
 so that
children
 will get attracted
on
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 those behavioural notes.
Thus
, it is clear that
Parents
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 and
teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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role
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roles
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 will have
huge
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a huge
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 positive
impact
 on kids.
On the other hand
, nowadays
the
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Private and public
organization
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organizations
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 have
vital
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role
on
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youth
mentalness
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metalness
.
For instance
, These firms are conducting
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number of
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seminars on how to live with and behave with good
qualities
 and how not to addict to bad things on daily basis.
Youth
 should be encouraged to participate
these
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type
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types
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 of sessions so that they will acquire
the
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Good
qualities
 and eliminate
the
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bad behavioural manners.
Therefore
 it
widely known
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 that Public and Private firms have
huge
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a huge
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role
 in
children
's
mindset
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mindsets
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. To summarise,
Parents
 and public
Organization
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Organizations
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 have
positive
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a positive
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impact
 on
children
's behaviour. It is Agreed that Good Parenting plays a
huge
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hugely
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 significant
impact
 in
youth
mindset
 with
resept
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respect
 to bad
mindset
. After
thorough
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 analysis
on
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this
 subject. It is predicted that
Parents
 along with some small
guidence
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guidance
by
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the orgnization
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orgnization
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organisation
,
Youth
 will lead
a
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 best life in society with good manners and behaviour.
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