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Biotechnology companies all over the world are developing different types of genetically modified (GM) crops. However, not enough is known about these crops on our health and the environment. Interfering with nature in this way should be prohibited. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that scientists in every era are giving their best in searching how to heal illnesses
people
. Today biotechnology companies are developing different types of genetically modified (GM)
crops
. These
crops
 might have a positive effect on our health and environment.
However
, there might be some negative effects that are not completely clear. In
this
 essay I am going to discuss do we have to prohibit these
crops
 or not. On the one hand, some
people
 argue about the possibility of these
crops
 healing complex illnesses.
In other words
, it could be our gate to a new bright future in the medical field.
For example
, we see colds and coughing as normal things these days, and these
crops
 can help us find solutions to the huge problems that are facing us today.
Moreover
, Scientists will continue studying
this
 new invention and by the time it we can fix the negative effects that could happen when using it.
On the other hand
, some
people
 say that these
crops
 might have a negative impact on the human body in the long run. they argue about the possibility of having some problems that have not been discovered yet
,
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 and might appear over time.
In addition
, some biotechnology companies do not give attention to health while all of their attention goes to money. In conclusion, we can be sure about one thing, there will be some moral scientists who will always put all of their life into saving other life. These genetic
crops
 might have negative effects, but it is doing a great job, and they will get better over time. In my point of view, I think that the
people
 who are in charge must put an effort into
this
, and prevent the harmful
crops
 and companies from
this
 field
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 while putting rules and obligations.
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