There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter, •describe what the problem with the changing rooms is •say what happened the last time you complained •explain what you want the manager to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

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letter in order to complain about problems with the changing rooms in the sports centre that I visit,

as well as

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suggest some solutions.

Firstly

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lights

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the lights

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do not work properly and most of them are damaged.

Therefore

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night

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night,

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we can not use the dressing rooms,

additionally

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, cleaners do not pay much attention to floor cleaning and cupboards,

although

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they are there the whole time,

hence

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the cleaning problem has become annoying.

In addition

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this

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doors are broken. Not only did I

complaint

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complain

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about

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issue, but all the members did as well. I have

complaint

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complained

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several times about

this

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issue but nothing has changed and with no success,

hence

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I decided to speak to you directly.

Finally

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, I would like to suggest some solutions, first of all, fixing all the lights or

change

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changing

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to new lights,

moreover

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changing

cleaning

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the cleaning

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staff who commit to doing their job properly, replace the door with a new one. I hope you will take my complaints into account. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Nilufar Sharipova

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task achievement

Try to avoid repetitive phrases such as 'I have complaint' and consider using 'I have complained' to ensure grammatical accuracy.

coherence cohesion

Consider adding more transitional words to make the paragraphs flow more smoothly.

coherence cohesion

Avoid mixing several ideas in one sentence to make your points clearer.

greeting and closing

The closing and salutation are appropriate and polite.

task achievement

The letter addresses all relevant points clearly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

188 words

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