There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter, •describe what the problem with the changing rooms is •say what happened the last time you complained •explain what you want the manager to do
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter in order to complain about problems with the changing rooms in the sports centre that I visit, as well as
suggest some solutions.
Firstly
, lights
do not work properly and most of them are damaged. Correct article usage
the lights
Therefore
at night
we can not use the dressing rooms, Add a comma
night,
additionally
, cleaners do not pay much attention to floor cleaning and cupboards, although
they are there the whole time, hence
the cleaning problem has become annoying. In addition
to this
doors are broken. Not only did I complaint
about Replace the word
complain
this
issue, but all the members did as well.
I have complaint
several times about Replace the word
complained
this
issue but nothing has changed and with no success, hence
I decided to speak to you directly.
Finally
, I would like to suggest some solutions, first of all, fixing all the lights or change
to new lights, Wrong verb form
changing
moreover
changing cleaning
staff who commit to doing their job properly, replace the door with a new one.
I hope you will take my complaints into account. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully,
Nilufar SharipovaCorrect article usage
the cleaning
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task achievement
Try to avoid repetitive phrases such as 'I have complaint' and consider using 'I have complained' to ensure grammatical accuracy.
coherence cohesion
Consider adding more transitional words to make the paragraphs flow more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Avoid mixing several ideas in one sentence to make your points clearer.
greeting and closing
The closing and salutation are appropriate and polite.
task achievement
The letter addresses all relevant points clearly.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite