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Children as young as right own a mobile phone nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays everyone must have a mobile
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 which is connected with the internet world, even kids. The
last
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 few decads got a huge improvement on technology,
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this
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 made a
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 of
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 easier,
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 as : comunication and learning. Today even the children have a mobile which is connected with a two sided weapon 'internet'. In
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 essay, we are going to discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of the
child
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 having
phone
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. On the one
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, the concept of a
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 having a
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, gives us lots of beniefts, like : giving him access to unlimit knowledge and having the ability to improve on an early age.
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, today we can see a
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 of little children who know how to hack
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 and build apps, others know a
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 of knowledge in math.
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,
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 is a huge thing if use right. Another advantage, having a mobile
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 on his
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 makes it easier to comunicate with his family or friends. Even if the parents lost him they can easly know where is he by the GPS.
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hand
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, some poeple argue that
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 is a big problem because he or she has the access to anything, which contains adult content and sensitive topics.
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, there is a high possiblity of destroying the kid's personality by
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 like : trolling, and watching adult content or blood and criminals topics. Most of the parents do not have the time and the attention with their kids which might guide them for those
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. In conclusion, internet is a two faced weapon if you do not use it right it will consume you. Putting it between kid's
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 should be with a
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 of care and resposibilty. In my point of view, I think that parents can give there
child
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 a
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 but with some rules and obligations. And if you are not sure about it,
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 do not risk it with your
child
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.
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