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some points that may help you to know why.

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the goal of the building's owner.

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is the position of work cuz it may have bad weather and facing all these problems the Architect have to finish his job.

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very hardworking people they work in sunny places and even freezing places so we must do our best to help them if not with planning maybe with increasing our budget or trying to finish all the papers needed.

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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.

Fully explain your ideas

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It Getting promotion is one of the biggest driver for people to apply to themselves and work hard in the modern workplace. Why do you think people are so driven to get promotion? What other factors influence people to work hard?

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.  Discuss both these views and give your own opinion