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Architectors as
a workers
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they
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care much about
that
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how
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the
buliding
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building
can survive the
condtions
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conditions
.so in
this
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i'm
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gonna
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illustrate
some points that may help you to know why.
First
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of all, Architectors have lots of work and every single part
in
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thier
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their
the
job needs to be
specifec
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specific
and
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focused
.In my POV
i
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think they try
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thier
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their
best to form a perfect building that
fulfill
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their
purpose not only
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their
purpose
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also
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the goal of the building's owner.
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,let's be honest Architect is a hard job it's kinda hard to balance between what you as an Architect want to do and what the owner wants,bare in mind
Archiect
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Architect
faces a lot of problems, the biggest
ones
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is the position of work cuz it may have bad weather and facing all these problems the Architect have to finish his job.
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, from my personal
experince
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experience
when our house was getting built the
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Architect
that was building our house faced a problem not only one but a lot starting from the budget
ending
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with some government objections. In
conclustion
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conclusion
,Architects are
a
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very hardworking people they work in sunny places and even freezing places so we must do our best to help them if not with planning maybe with increasing our budget or trying to finish all the papers needed.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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