some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.

....Our time is the time of freedom, restricting
information
from being public because of
security
and national
security
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find it a bit silly.because
this
stuff is happening in my country
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guess
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need to know it, not only stuff related to
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national
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stuff like research results, if it's published it may help us
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with
a lot of things in our daily
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. ....
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with, sensitive
information
,
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penetrate the
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security
such
as
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location
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etc...., needs to be investigated first,but the other
information
that could help the citizen in choosing
such
a good brand
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think
it
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must be published. ....Can you imagine that there
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a lot of other technology that has been
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discovered
but kept in secret, why do you think is that?
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tell you...that because the
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national forces think that everything they find must be kept
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secret, didn't you think about why did the covid-19
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so quickly like what
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happened
. in my pov
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think it's a humanmade virus it's not what they are saying it came from bats..bla..bla. ....On the opposite,scientific research mostly depends on available data and previous discoveries.If valuable
information
and findings that
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happened
happen
in the past are not shared openly with academics and researchers,the progress will be frozen until a factory or lab
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to discover it.
while
we have the other option that academics or researchers can do it immediately.
Moreover
, secret
information
has no value if it's not implemented in the real world.
Finally
, world history suggests that the human race has advanced
due to
discoveries and inventions shared with the world as each finding went through modification and advancement, in my
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opinion
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support that
infromation
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information
is free for all. ....In conclusion,
information
has limited value when it is kept and not shared with other minds. For true global progress,
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on valuable
information
should be stopped and let people know the truth
instead
of keeping them in hidden darkness.
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