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some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in orter to be successful at school. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #children #homework #orter #school
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Some individuals feel that youngsters should not be assigned
homework
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 on a daily basis,
others
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while others
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 feel that in order to be successful in
school
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, they must complete
homework
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 every day. In my opinion,
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homework
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everyday
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 can build pressure
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 the student and make him/her hate the
school
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. Many people think that
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 more
homeworks
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homework
 to
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students will make them more academically
effecient
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efficient
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 will build more information and skills to solve problems.
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, when
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homework
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assigned
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 to the
puipls
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pupils
 daily
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 will
encourge
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encourage
 them to work hard to solve it at home without the help of their teachers.
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result
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 they gain the experience to tackle problems in the way they have learned at
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 and
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 will increase the chances of their success in the future.
On the other hand
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, there are many
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who do
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 not find it comfortable to keep assigning
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homework
eveyday
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everyday
every day
 to
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children
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. What is more, following
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 strategy may affect the
children
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 negatively in a way that
make
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makes
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 the
children
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 feel always busy
in
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doing
homeworks
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homework
 and
do
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not have time to relax and enjoy the rest of their day.
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, the
children
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 will get depressed and start to lose the joy of going to
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,
becasue
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because
 they will think they will have
homework
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 after they leave, and they can not arrange other activities during the rest of the time. To conclude
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, some people agree that the strategy of giving
homework
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 on a daily basis
wil
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will
 result in
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a more
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 successful character.
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, others find it more
harming
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on
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 the long run, since it can cause the child to be always stuck and can not find time to play or learn new skills.
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