some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in orter to be successful at school. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some individuals feel that youngsters should not be assigned
homework
on a daily basis,
others
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feel that in order to be successful in
school
, they must complete
homework
every day. In my opinion,
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homework
everyday
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can build pressure
of
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the student and make him/her hate the
school
. Many people think that
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more
homeworks
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homework
to
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students will make them more academically
effecient
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efficient
.
This
will build more information and skills to solve problems.
For example
, when
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homework
assigned
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to the
puipls
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pupils
daily
this
will
encourge
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encourage
them to work hard to solve it at home without the help of their teachers.
As a
result
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they gain the experience to tackle problems in the way they have learned at
school
and
this
will increase the chances of their success in the future.
On the other hand
, there are many
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not find it comfortable to keep assigning
homeworks
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homework
eveyday
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everyday
every day
to
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children
. What is more, following
this
strategy may affect the
children
negatively in a way that
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the
children
feel always busy
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doing
homeworks
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homework
and
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not have time to relax and enjoy the rest of their day.
Consequently
, the
children
will get depressed and start to lose the joy of going to
school
,
becasue
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because
they will think they will have
homework
after they leave, and they can not arrange other activities during the rest of the time. To conclude
with
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, some people agree that the strategy of giving
homework
on a daily basis
wil
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will
result in
more
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successful character.
However
, others find it more
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on
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the long run, since it can cause the child to be always stuck and can not find time to play or learn new skills.
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